Perspective

We are learning how to use different perspective to help make our story writing more interesting. We wrote both first person and third adapting fairy tales then we made up a story about a plant.
Here are so examples of what the students in my class came up with.

Third Person:

A little while after they moved into the house. It was a very old house, it had an attic in the high pitched roof and a cellar under the ground. Coraline's family didn't own all of the house it was too big for that. Instead they owned part of it. There were other people who lived in the old house. Miss Spink and Miss Forcible lived in the flat below Coraline’s. On the ground floor they were both old and round, and they lived in their flat with a number of ageing highland terriers who had names like Hamish and Andrew and Jock. - Krystal

She called, “Hello.”
No one answered. She could smell some hot butter chicken in the cottage. Goldilocks called out again. Then she saw three chairs, an oval wooden table and three bowls. One was small, the second one was medium and one last was big. 
Her tummy growled. The delicious aroma too much for her. She took a bite. The first was too hot, the second one was cold and the third one was perfect. - Justyce

The long snake like path led to a small house with a roof made out of branches. The walls made out of brick and it was a gloomy day, so she went inside the house. Smelling the scent of sweet porridge as she looked at the bowls on the table. She tried the first bowl that she saw.
“YUCK it’s too cold,” Goldy said.
So she went to the next bowl and tried the porridge. 
“AHH IT BURNS,” she said as she ran round and round. - Dante

First Person:

I was planted in a bottomless pit. I was freezing, I got planted without anything, no 

water, sunlight or nutrients. It felt like I was in a chilli bin, it was that pitch black. Did I 
mention it was wet, because it has raining for hours. Until I got the sun over me, then 
finally I was getting a bit warmer every minute. - Te Iriwhiro

I was so sad my Step Mother and my Step Sisters went to the ball, leaving  me at home,
cleaning up and cooking. 
‘When do I get to go to the ball?’ I wondered. - Krystal

“ OUCH!!!” I said.
“ Who was that And why do I feel trapped, enclosed” I wondered.
“Hmmm what to do,” I thought. “Uhhh I'll just wait.”
4 days later…
“ I'm tired of waiting, I'm going  to push myself out”.
“I'm finally free. OMG I feel so good, stretched out.”
“Woh, I am growing, out of this tiny shell.  - Dante

I was so lonely in the pitch black soil. My mean owner never came to water me the only one who watered me was the clouds. 
“Oh dear what is going on here.” I wondered to myself. “I can finally move around and relaxed.” - Breeze

I was a lonely seed in a pitch black hole. I had no friends. When I was buried I was watered. But right now I'll stay put right here to be watered again. 
The next day I got watered. Now I looked at myself there was something appearing out. 
The next day I figure out what it was. It was my roots. 
A few days later I grew a shoot. I wish I knew what would happen to me next. 
“Would I stay like this? Or would I grow more?” - Akram

Writing a Narrative

Writing a narrative seems a logical next step for children who have been writing recounts of their own experiences. They just have to add some imagination to their story. Children are full of imagination so this should be easy right?

We have been reading Wonder by RJ Palacio.

As we have been reading we have found a range of figures of speech used. One of my favourite is hyperbola or exaggeration. Everyone's heard the story of the fish that got away it was too big to fit in the boat anyway.

Wonder is no exception Auggy talks about knowing every brick on the street. And we wondered every brick, does he mean that makes a fence? That is a lot of bricks. So every brick for every house WOW!

The reaction to using exaggeration has been positive. The children even wrote the worst pizza stories ever. Here are some examples of their exaggeration.


In front of me was the most disgusting, horrible pizza on burger buns. It would put me off my food for life. On top of the bun was pineapple, cheese, BBQ sauce, onions, sliced frankfurters and the worst part about it was the wiggly worms in hot sauce and chicken feat. I covered my mouth to stop my stomach churning. - Amelia

Then our teacher changed her smile grew wicked, the gleam in her eyes was scary. I waited for my pizza. The smell of the pizza drifted my way. Mmm..mm it smells yummy, but not when I saw my friends pizza with worms in it I was about to vomit.  When I got my pizza it had chicken feet in my pizza, I am never going to eat pizza again. - Krystal Leigh.

My puku was rumbling I had never been so hungry. I gathered my plate of pizza. As I stepped out the door my pizza fell on the ground. I couldn't believe the speed of the ants covering the bun. I picked them up to flick off the ant only to find the tiniest rocks stuck in the cheese. I was so hungry I did not want to tell anybody that I'd dropped my pizza. I took a bite and felt the rocks grating against my teeth. I dry reached. I'll never look at a pizza the same way again. - Braedyn

When I had the pizza on my plate I was about to taste it but I saw something moving inside the pizza. I wanted to vomit. It had worms in hot sauce and chicken feet too. Ugh! I looked away from my pizza I had never seen something so disgusting. - Mariah